Shiloh, Angelina, Brad, and a Misplaced Modifier

June 3, 2006

A personalized pacifier company sent a $17,000 binky to Shiloh Nouvel Jolie-Pitt covered in diamonds. If Angelina Jolie and Brad Pitt were to donate an equivalent amount of money to charity, they would be able to pay for 10,000 safe-delivery kits for women who live in regions without hospitals or clinics.

The first sentence contains a misplaced modifier. Since the phrase "covered in diamonds" immediately follows "Shiloh Nouvel Pitt-Jolie," it appears to describe the baby instead of the binky. Shiloh is probably not covered in diamonds (or else she is most likely very uncomfortable). The binky is covered in diamonds. To correct the sentence, move the modifier closer to the word it modifies.

A personalized pacifier company sent a $17,000 binky covered in diamonds to Shiloh Nouvel Jolie-Pitt. If Angelina Jolie and Brad Pitt were to donate an equivalent amount of money to charity, they would be able to pay for 10,000 safe-delivery kits for women who live in regions without hospitals or clinics.

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