Rachel, Angelina, and a Faulty Comparison

June 2, 2006

Rachel Weisz gave birth to a baby boy this week, but the excitement surrounding his birth is nothing like Angelina Jolie's baby girl.

This sentence contains a faulty comparison. What is being compared? The first part of the comparison is "the excitement surrounding his birth." The second part of the comparison is "Angelina Jolie's baby girl." It is not logical to compare excitement to a baby girl. To correct this error, restructure the sentence to create a logical comparison.

Rachel Weisz gave birth to a baby boy this week, but the excitement surrounding his birth is nothing like the hubbub about Angelina Jolie's baby girl.

This sentence compares excitement to a hubbub. This is a logical comparison. This sentence is correct.

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